T1+Writing


 * Persuasive Writing- Why should people come to the BOP?**

__Tuesday 5th April 2011__

__BOP Tourism__

**WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.**

**Success Criteria** **My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion** **I will state and restate my opinion** **I use a range of language resources and punctuation** **My paragraphs follow the S E E structure**

Why should you come to the Bay Of Plenty? I’ll tell you why, because we’ve got great beaches, and a lovely community. I reckon you should come to the Bay Of Plenty because its not too expensive, and you’ll have a great time.

My first reason is of course the fact that you pay hardly anything to come here. The only thing you would really spend your money on would be buying a hokey pokey ice-cream, which would be perfect while you’re lying on our great beaches over at the mount. Also while your here don’t just bring your jandals, you’ll need your walking shoes too, to walk round or up Mount Maunganui, and take a look at the great view.

We’ve got a lovely community that are always willing to help. For example you’re here for the day, you really wanted to get something to eat, but you don’t know where to go, we’ll help you figure it out and tell you where it is located you’ll have one of the best meals of your time. There are people who love the Bay Of Plenty so much they come here for a holiday each year sometimes even 2 or 3 times, so come and see their holiday paradise.

Don’t go anywhere else. I guarantee this is the place to be, we have so much to offer. I think you should come here and have some of the best days in your life, right here in the Bay Of Plenty, you won’t regret it. There are so many places to go and see and it will cost you hardly anything. Come here and no doubt will you have the time of your life! Some excellent persuasive language used here Georgina, well done. Your use of personal pronouns is very effective and I really feel like you are speaking to me. Good examples used in you paragraphs, now focus on linking your paragraphs for e.g. firstly, secondly, my next reason...... You are missing a paragraph, remember your three ideas need three separate paragraphs. A fantastic effort showing excellent progress with your writing. Miss Crone :)